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Natural resources such as oil,fresh water,and forests are fast disappearing from the earth. why is this happening? is it dangerous? suggest solutions?

Many countries around the world have witnessed colossal growth over the past several years and momentous changes have been the bedrock of all-around progress. These developments which are often publicised as a cure for all worldly afflictions often come with many nemeses in their wake- chief among them would be: depleting natural
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. Most
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 would not find it shocking, if
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 trend were to heighten in the coming years, considering the current trajectory of the modern world. in
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 scenario, it becomes ever so relevant to discuss the causes that lie behind the spreading of menace, the resulting as well as the remedial measures that could help stop the problem in its tracks. There are ,of course, many forces at play here which cause and accentuate the depletion of natural
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. One of the main contributing factors is population growth and the growing aspirations p
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. Not long before,
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 were often contented with their possessions, but
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 is no longer the case. In fact,
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 want much more than what their neighbours have- from petrol-guzzling SUVs to palatial mansions- and do so fast, all of which require an inordinate amount of
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 like
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 and
oil
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 to be used up. Making matters worse is the widespread industrialisation and urbanisation supported by the governments. As new cities spring up and industries expand, they take up areas which were previously untouched by civilization, like a forest.
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, the city of Kuala Lumpur was once a forest area, the trace of which was hardly seen these days. The consequence of disappearing natural
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 can be absolutely devastating. The limited availability of fresh
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 and
oil
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 can cut the economic growth of countries, thereby leading to a spike in unemployment, crime and poverty. It is worth remembering that many wars are flared up for want of access to
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 and
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.
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, the destruction of forests could lead to erratic weather patterns, which could set in motion the decline in agricultural yield. The net effect would be that
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 inflation could raise its ugly head, resulting in social unrest-which everyone would agree, is not in the interest of anyone.
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 there are many factors behind
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 phenomenon and they continue to intensify, there are several courses of action open to us. The most important of these is for governments to implement strict laws to prevent deforestation. It would
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 be better if the price of
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 could be increased substantially to curb its usage. To top it all, awareness campaigns could be organised by environmental organisations to check the pollution of
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resources
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 by industries, so that, access to potable
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 is enhanced over time. To sum up, it's true that we cannot ignore the issue of depleting natural
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, as it's clear in the current scenario. The effects, as one could imagine, are serious.
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, if we effectively implemented the above-mentioned solutions
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 the path to solving
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 issue would be easier. As always, the human race should take responsibility to curb
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 problem whereby we can avert the disaster that would
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 fall upon us.

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