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Technology has made man more social or less social Discuss both views and give opinion

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In modern society, there is a controversial topic that
technology
 makes
people
 more social or less social. In
this
 essay, I will examine
this
 question from both sides of view and explain why I believe the former statement. Focusing
first
 on the side of
people
 suggesting that
technology
 makes
people
 less social, it is possible to say that it affects particularly in terms of enjoyment. One good illustration is that recent children tend to prefer gaming in the house, without participating in play outside with their friends. World Health Organisation issued that modern young
childchildren
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child children
, especially those living in developed countries, have
the
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fragile physical conditions and unsettled mental health compared to children born before 1980.
This
 is because children lose a chance to directly communicate with friends so they did not get socialising skills at an early age. Moving on to the positive side,
technology
 provides
people
variety
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 of opportunities to participate
international
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 meetings,
such
 as business conferences, academic lessons and empowerment programmes.
People
 can participate
any
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 meetings with one tablet from all over the world.
This
 milestone gave business
person
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people
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 and students
with
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tremendous
oppotunities
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opportunities
 to connect overseas professionals.
Therefore
, it is possible to say
technology
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 could connect
people
 with
borderless
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a borderless
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 environment and broaden their horizons. In conclusion,
technology
 made
human
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humans
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 more socialise than ever before. It generated massive
oppotunities
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opportunities
 regardless of the borders.
However
, I agree with the effects which caused
people
 more
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 in
negative
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a negative
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 way, especially for the young generations.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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