Friends have more impact on the academic performance of students than their teachers do. Do you agree or disagree? Use details and examples to support your opinion.

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of all, I strongly believe that
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have more
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on the academic performance of
students
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than their
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do.
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is because
students
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spend more time at school with
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. Throughout school life, colleagues hang out and talk with their
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.
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could potentially
influence
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the time spent on their studies. In some
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groups
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, helping each other by solving math problems together is common.
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, in some other
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groups
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,
students
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end up
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due to distractions.
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, I think that
friends
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have more
influence
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on
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school grades than
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do.
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, there was a scientifically proven study that conversations with companions could have both positive and negative impacts on educational achievements. In
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study,
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groups
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that talked about global occurrences and news showed high grades in their reports.
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, other
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groups
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that talked about social media and animals were not able to represent great appraisal. There could be a positive impact on
students
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’ assessments in social studies since
friends
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are capable of broadening
students
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’ horizons and
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they perceive
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modern society.
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some people argue that
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are the most vital factor in enhancing
students
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’ academic performance; I suppose that
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do not have as much
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as their companions.
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is because even if there are amazing
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, revisions and outside
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are more essential.
Students
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attain upstanding grades since they
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enough in tackling challenging questions during examinations.
Students
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are ready for tests because they have completed a lot of past papers. What
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more,
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students
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classmates affect
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more because they are able to stimulate each others’ motivations and how much effort they put in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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