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Many people think that zoos are not good enough for animals and they should be improved or animals must go to natural life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Well, I guess most people believe that for
animals
 the best environment is natural life
instead
 of
zoos
 ,
moreover
 there are no good opportunities for them in cages. Well, if we want to keep
animals
 in
zoos
,
first
 of all ,it is necessary to improve the quality of these places and feed those inhabitants on time. It is necessary to pay more attention to the size , convenience and quality of inspection of
zoos
 . These creatures need a natural environment in order to behave freely .
For example
 ,birds should be kept in larger and higher places and predators should be kept in larger places ,adapted to their size .
Second
 of all ,
instead
 of developing
zoos
,
animals
 should be set free . Because they were born in wildlife .They are savage
animals
 that's why they should not be kept in captivity .And again
animals
 in the zoo are much weaker than those in the wild. If they are released into the wildlife . They cannot get used to it and may even die. Well , my conclusion is that
animals
 should either be brought to special modern spaces for people to enjoy and have fun watching them or they should be allowed to live freely in their own space .
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