More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicine. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. What extent do you agree?
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medicine
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adapt
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adopt
medicine
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I will explain why I firmly disagree with Add a comma
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medicine
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people
tend to eat unhealthy food and drinks, Use synonyms
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are suffering from obesity and high blood pressure. To mitigate these symptoms, humans should change their lifestyles. These problems are not fixed only by Use synonyms
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can rehabilitate modern mental based illness. Modern Use synonyms
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such
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the
rapid industrialisation and modernisation. Correct article usage
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escape
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and hense
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preventing
these symptoms.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite