More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicine. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. What extent do you agree?

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In modern society, one of
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is health problems and modern
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. Some
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suggest that
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should
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traditional
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in spite of using
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medicine
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I will explain why I firmly disagree with
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opinion. The
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reason is that
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should focus
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the modern lifestyle, not the trend of
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. Compared to
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traditional life,
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tend to eat unhealthy food and drinks,
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as junk foods and soft drinks.
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is because modern
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are suffering from obesity and high blood pressure. To mitigate these symptoms, humans should change their lifestyles. These problems are not fixed only by
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is the issue of modern habitat. Another reason is that only
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medicine
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can rehabilitate modern mental based illness. Modern
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tend to suffer from mental health
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as heavy depression and overworking stress. It is possible to say that these
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of syndrome
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appeared because of
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rapid industrialisation and modernisation.
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, it is difficult to completely
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modern society,
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latest
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can be a saviour
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these symptoms. In conclusion, I strongly believe that healthy eating habitat can mitigate
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physical problems and
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medicine
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can rehabilitate modern mental
ilnesses
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illnesses
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in modern society. For the reasons above, I strongly disagree with the statement.
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