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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
Different
personalities
 of people are with various capabilities when facing risks both in their professional and personal lives.
This
 essay will evaluate the weight of the pros and cons of taking risks and I would like to give my opinion as well. When considering the
risk
-taking capacity, the main categories can be highlighted as
risk
 lovers,
risk
 takers,
risk
 neutral and
risk
 averse. Folks who are inbuilt
risk
 lovers and
risk
-takers
personalities
 are willing to accept
risk
 in an enthusiastic way and use
risk
 for the betterment of their lives. Those
personalities
 take
risk
 as challengers which create a motivational environment to achieve the targets at the office as well as the home. Since
childhood
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 everyone has to surpass the different stages in life and each and every stage consist of various hazard that should be faced at proportionate levels. These milestones build self-satisfaction and courage to move forward towards the
next
 step of the path.
However
, some categories namely
risk
-neutral and
risk
-averse are not in to accept
risk
.
Although
 we have to accept a considerable level of challenges when achieving the targets ,
risk
 could create a stressful environment for these types of
personalities
 which leads to end up in the trap of depression and anxiety. Mental health is a priority in both professional and personal life. In conclusion, even though a few drawbacks are there when accepting
risk
, the benefits outweigh the disadvantages which
lead
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leads
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 to emphasising the fact that, it is essential to face hazards in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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