Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending in health education and preventive measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is a fact that preventing from being sick is
beneficial
than Correct quantifier usage
more beneficial
treatment
. Governments
by increasing the budget of
training healthy Change preposition
for
lifestyle
and investing Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
on
Change preposition
in
this
sector will be benefited rather than spending on caring and
curing patients’ people.
Investing in Change preposition
for and
health
education and public awareness, help to reduce diseases
and saving
money. Costs of Wrong verb form
save
treatment
and hospitals are high in most countries, additionally
, treatment
has cost for governments
too. Because governments
want to equip hospitals with the
sophisticated medical technologies and equipment, Correct article usage
apply
therefore
, these tools put a huge burden on the governments
. For example
, the number of diabetics is increasing, in my country, while by
awareness and education can prevent or keep the speed of incidence of diabetes or heart Change preposition
apply
diseases
. Fix the agreement mistake
disease
Such
steps toward health
education will help to reduce the cost of treatment
and number
of patients in near future.
Several Correct article usage
the number
governments
combat against
some Change preposition
apply
diseases
such
as poor sanitation, viruses, and heart diseases
. While prevention help to reduce the infection of such
problems,
if Remove the comma
apply
governments
do some actions. For example
, some governments
can make more parks, gyms and fitness buildings with lower costs rather than making more health
centers
. The more people Change the spelling
centres
do
exercise, the Unnecessary verb
apply
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
hearth
Correct your spelling
heart
diseases
and diabetes will happen. Fix the agreement mistake
disease
This
may enable by informing and educating public
about their Add an article
the public
health
, and above all by allocating a portion of budget
Add an article
the budget
of
preventive measures to heighten Change preposition
to
the
public awareness.
In conclusion, I agree with increasing the budget for educating people having a healthy lifestyle and doing preventive measures rather than spending on equipping hospitals and Correct article usage
apply
treatment
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