Some people say that we should always follow our dreams, even if the dreams are very ambitious. Others think that we should focus on achieving realistic goals. Which view do you agree with?

Modern
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and sophisticated
world
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is defining our
dreams
,
goals
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and goals
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in very different
meaning
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for
people
. Especially nowadays
people
always think about
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dreams
or follow achieving realistic
goals
for a long
time
. Which one is
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way for us? Who knows? It is a controversial question for all of us. But I want to explain
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question
in
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my perspective in the following paragraph.
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my perspective,
people
never give up
to
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the image
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image
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and try to follow
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their dreams
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but there is a thin line between
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castle
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in the sky ambitiously and
focus
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just realistic
goals
we can. Giving up
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dream
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dreams
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,
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may feel
depressive
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so in my
opinion
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to
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image
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imagining
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something is an ordinary
humanity
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behavior
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behaviour
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and we need it.
Additionally
, as a human, we need to think logically
on
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something and when we start talking about
future
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, we are going through a controversial process both inside of us and society in about how the person we will be in the future should be.
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The answer
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of
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the question is simple,
for
example
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I
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, whenever I
image
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a
dream
, I feel so happy and
relax
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but thinking
the
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about the
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dream
with my logic everything changes and I start feeling
depressive
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or
anxiety
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. I come through
this
process easily how?
Firstly
, I write my
dreams
and analyze the
time
such
as how long will it take me to reach my
dreams
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Then
I divide
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the time
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as
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into as
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little parts as I need to achieve my
dreams
. After I determine small realistic
goals
for my
dream
, I just strive to achieve small realistic
goals
so after a long
time
, if I can achieve all of these small
goals
successfully, at the end of the day, I have fulfilled my
dreams
. It is within
people
to
dream
, but to continue in a disciplined way is
also
a bit related to our personal characteristics. Since I am not a very disciplined person, I always break my big
dreams
and
goals
into small ones so that I achieve my
dreams
with short-term discipline and small successes. The
road
to a big
dream
is always long and we want to finish
this
long
road
with excitement, but when we start the
road
, we become unhappy after a certain period of
time
because the target is too far away and we give up on
this
dream
. For
this
reason, short-term small
goals
both make the
road
fun and allow us to realize our
dreams
.
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