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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is clear that living in a foreign
country
 has its own benefits and drawbacks to consider. I agree with
this
 statement.
However
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 I think that anybody coming from another
country
 should respect the national culture. In
this
 essay, I would like to outline the social and practical problems. The social
problem
 would be a
language
 barrier, which means that a
person
 coming from another
country
 might not be able to speak and understand the
language
 which might be a
problem
 as far as a
person
 who is living in a
country
, and a
person
 who came to the
country
. Another
problem
 is linked to the
language
 barrier, but it might influence the behaviour of others. An individual who comes into the
country
 might offend others with their behaviour and
language
.
For example
, in some
cultures
 like English
people
 prefer to be very polite and say things differently from other
cultures
.
Therefore
, a
person
 who doesn’t know how to behave in a particular culture might offend others around him. The practical
problem
 would be a misunderstanding of culture. That means that a
person
 who visits other countries does not understand other
cultures
 and he behaves as he wants to. The
second
 practical
problem
 is finding a job. An individual who works in a foreign
country
 might not be appropriate for the
people
 whom he serves.
For example
, if individual works in a restaurant, the
people
 who live in a
country
 and were born in that
country
 might not respect and not like the behaviour of a
person
 who works in a restaurant, it might be because
,
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 the
cultures
 are different. To summarize, it can be said that there are a lot of misconceptions which
people
 have when they come to a foreign
country
, and in my opinion and from my personal experience
people
 should educate themselves in order to know how to behave in different situations with different
cultures
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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