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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by seleting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by seleting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pictures compare the change in
road
 access to a
city
 hospital between the years 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
road
 has become much more modern, with far more facilities. One interesting is that two new
car
 parks were built. In 2007, the public and staff had to use the same parking, which
it
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was inconvenient for both, the old
car
park
 was opposite a hospital and next to the
City
road
. If we look at Hospital
road
 in 2007, there were six bus stops to the west of the
car
park
 next to
City
Road
. In 2010, 6 bus tops were removed,
instead
, they transformed
it
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into the bus station on the left-hand side of Hospital
road
. In 2000, there wasn't any roundabout connecting the
city
 hospital to the hospital
road
, but it was added in 2010. Two
car
 parks were distinguished, one for the public and the other for staff. The public
car
park
 was in the east of the
city
 hospital,
while
 the staff
car
park
 was on the right-hand side of
Hospital
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the Hospital
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road
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, car, park with synonyms.
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