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Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world’s forest amounts to death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#forests #lungs #earth #destruction #world’s #forest #amounts #death #world
It is undoubtedly true that different
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species
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animals
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 living in the
forest
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However
,
destruction
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the destruction
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the
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forest
area
which
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lead
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 to many issues. From my
prespective
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perspective
, I tend to stand with the former statement by considering
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several facts.
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this
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 positive aspect of the thread and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There are plethora
reasons
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 to agree with the meritorious side.
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First
 and Foremost is that
due to
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overpopulation in the global
area
, destroying the
forest
area
 and
constructing
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 the building
which
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directly
affecting
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the
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animal's
habitat
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habitats
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. Another observation related to
this
 issue is that most of the raw materials and medicine producing from the tree.
Industry
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 will not able to supply
demands
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 of the product to the citizens.
Secondly
, Tree is the primary source of
the
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food and shelter for
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animals,
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and alot
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alot
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a lot
 of
the
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spieces
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species
pieces
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be die
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 which lead to
imbalance
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biodiversity
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in biodiversity
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 and
it's became
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it becomes
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 crucial to
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human's
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 life.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
tree
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the tree
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 is the natural ability to absorb the
carbondioxide
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carbon dioxide
 from the atmosphere and provide oxygen.To probe more deeply, amazon
providing
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 72% of the oxygen level into the air and it's
benefical
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beneficial
 to
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living creature. Needless to say
that
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, all the merits stand in
a
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good stead. In
recapulation
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recapitulation
, according to the argument aforementioned above the instrumental
are
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indeed
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true
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.Government should
enforcing
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 the law against the people who
destroying
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destroy
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 the
forest
area
 .
Consequently
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I'm firmly agree
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to
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 the given statement.
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