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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SPACE EXPLORATION IS A WASTE OF RESOURCES, WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT IT IS ESSENTIAL FOR MANKIND TO CONTINUE TO EXPLORE THE UNIVERSE IN WHICH WE LIVE. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR VALUABLE OPINION.

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Some individuals consider
space
exploration
as
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a waste of money and
resources
 as it requires a
lot
 of it, whereas others believe that it is crucial for a better future for mankind and that
space
exploration
 should be continued.
This
 disquisition will discuss both the views and I will give my opinion in conclusion. To commence with, in
this
 contemporary epoch, many countries
putting
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 more
efforts
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in
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into
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 exploring
the
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space
 and due to
this
 a
lot
 of
resources
 are used and some people find it
as
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a waste.
In addition
,
space
exploration
 needs time and
resources
, which are needed for
humans
 in
this
 phase of life or through which
humans
 are surviving, it needs fossil fuels and many other
resources
which
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are required for
humans
 to survive and some individuals believe that in the future there will be more demand than the supply of
resources
 and due to
this
, they think that
space
exploration
 is a waste of
resources
.
On the other hand
, others state that
space
exploration
 is essential because of the increasing population, they think that
increasing
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 number of people will require more daily
resources
 like water and food, and finding life on other planets will be helpful in future. Another reason can be the environment as people are spoiling it by using unwanted sources like plastic,
carbon
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and carbon
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 which impacts the Earth badly.
Moreover
, many countries put a
lot
 of emphasis on finding water and food on other
planet
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planets
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 and
also
 they are using environmentally friendly equipment and
resources
.
For example
, an Indian
space
 research organization uses solar power to run their device named the mars rover to find life on Mars. In conclusion, in my opinion, a
lot
 of
resources
 are required for
space
exploration
 which is very essential for
humans
 and countries should start using environmentally friendly
resources
 to protect the environment, by doing it they can
also
 save a
lot
 of
resources
 that are needed for mankind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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