SOME CHILDREN SPEND HOURS EVERY DAY ON THEIR SMARTPHONES. WHY IS THIS THE CASE? DO YOU THINK THIS IS A POSITIVE OR A NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?
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smartphones
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a positive
trend
.
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children
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’s activities and keep them off
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bad
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the bad
influence
they can get from friends. Fix the agreement mistake
influences
In addition
, parents
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on
smartphone
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a smartphone
the smartphone
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children
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the internet.
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, when children
used smartphones
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a bad
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on
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easy to get distracted Add a verb
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study
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smartphones
for
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to
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that, it will make them have hard Replace the word
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interaction
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children
can be a target. It mainly
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the internet
be access
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be accessed
smartphones
and they used it every day.
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the smartphone
for
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on
children
like can forgotten
their studies, hard to have Add the auxiliary verb
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real life
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real-life
interaction
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using
smartphones
all day has negative effects, it has positive
side too like Add an article
a positive
children
can boost their knowledge in IT and other things. Parents
easy to monitor activities and filter any influences their children
will get. I, therefore
, remain firmly convinced that the growing trend in used
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using
smartphones
for hours by
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with
children
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