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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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In the modern world, illiteracy is a major problem that could impact society, employment levels, health, and the country's economic growth. The essay will discuss the causes of the lack of
education
 and the major three effects of illiteracy. Possibly the main cause is children from low-income
background
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 were the hardest to attend online classes and owning digital devices during the COVID-19 quarantation.
For instance
, 10-year-olds
unable
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 to read or understand a simple text and express themselves, up from 67% pre-pandemic, which might lead to
slow
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 development of society. Non-sufficient
education
 is
also
 caused by increased
poverty
 levels.
Poverty
 can result in many
people
 lacking fees to pay for children’s
education
, private classes or even
lack
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money to buy educational tools. The effects of
this
 issue on children would be severe.
Firstly
,
people
 who are
low
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literate often
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 health problems. These
people
 may not learn how to prevent infectious and non-communicable diseases. A
further
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 impact is adults who struggle with literacy are more likely to be poor, lack
education
, and miss out on opportunities to participate fully in society. For example, The Economic Institute found that only 20% of children living in
poverty
 are ready for school at age five, compared to 75% of kids with high incomes.
Lastly
, a person who is unable to read may have low self-esteem or feel negative emotions which lead to depression and other mental health disorders.
To sum up
, increased
poverty
 levels and online classes during the COVID-19 pandemic appear to be the main causes and they affect both the economic and social life of illiteracy
people
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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