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Band 4.5

some people like to try new things,for example,places to visit and type of food. other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

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about
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the
people
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world
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,we can broadly
catgorize
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categorize
 them
in
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into
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 two groups.Some
people
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 enjoy their life by
face
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 adventures and
also
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 getting risks.
Contary
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Contrary
 that
people
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 others are fond to live calm lives.According to these two types of
people
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, I prefer to
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 category.
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 I need to seek my capacities and talents. I suppose the
people
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first
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 category are
game changers
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.They believe
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in theirselves
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theirselves
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themselves
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 other than any beliefs.
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, there is one of my friends who worked in
multi national
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companywith
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company with
highest
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the highest
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 salary.Everything looked going well and suddenly he decided to resign
his
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 job and start
small
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 cafe.Noone
have
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 supported
for
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his idea but he did what he want.Today everyone
cite
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 him
as
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an as
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good
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for
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self confidence
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.
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 he earns today more than before. According to the
first
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people
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of people
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,they enjoy their lives with
varities
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varieties
.They
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fond
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 to visit places where they have never before and explore the world with experiences.They try to find their inner peace by wandering and
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 they never hesitate to try
new
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a new
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type
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types
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 of food.Even they don'
t
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 care about what other
people
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 think about them. When we consider about
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second
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 category, most of those
people
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are
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enjoy
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 their lives at home.They almost try not to out
their
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 comfort zone.When they are not
at
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in
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 their comfort place they become
misery
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. They
also
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 have very limited goals
for
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to
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achieve
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achieving
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.Their common belief is spontaneous lifestyle is not
worthy
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 as well as they don'
t
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 prefer travelling and
taste
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tasting
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 new food. I believe
these kind
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this kind
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 of
people
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 can'
t
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 be innovators and inverters.
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 they purposely hide their abilities and capacities to live
calm
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a calm
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 life.
As
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conclude
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,I suppose when
people
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 break their
limit
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,step out
from
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of
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 their comfort zone can explore their own abilities and capacities.I
don'
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won't
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t
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not
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no
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 failures but I believe failures can give huge effort to
the
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success. The tiny victory
of
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ourselves can
effect
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affect
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 our future and
also
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society's
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. So I suggest
break
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 your own rules and
fight
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fighting
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 for
the
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a
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 better world.

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