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Teenagers face a lot of problems in school and at home. What is the cause of this? How can parents for this?

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Nowadays, more and more children are facing some educational and social problems in educational centres and at
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. From my point of view, the main reason why most
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 problems might be their ability to learn and comprehend things. One of the initial reasons why
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 of
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certain challenges while studying is that
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 in the initial years of children who have entered school might face some troubles with learning
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certain abilities to write and speak since it is more difficult for
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children
 being able to write or speak as developing
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, according to
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 recent survey,
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 of the school
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 of knowledge
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students
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, there are
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 some ways
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available to deal with
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 problems and one of the possible solutions is that
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 teachers ought to increase the number of practices that have given to children and by doing that they will be able to provide their
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 system of teaching and can help them to improve some certain skills.
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,
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 of the UK’s public schools have provided their student with better ways of
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 and it helped a number of
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 to enhance their initial skills. To conclude, having weighed mentioned
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, I can come to the conclusion
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that, to deal with the problem discussed above, teachers should give their
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 more practice to enhance their abilities towards learning certain things
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