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Some people believe that it’s appropriate for children to learn a foreign language in primary school. Does the advantage of this outweigh its disadvantage?

#people #it’s #children #language #school #advantage #outweigh
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As the hegemony of the United States of America is expanding, more and more countries are encouraging
children
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 to study
English
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 as a
second
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language
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. While in some countries
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 as
Japan
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, many primary
students
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 begin their
English
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 from the fifth grade, most countries are learning foreign languages from many early ages. In
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 essay, I would like to show the pros and cons of studying a foreign
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 in primary
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 and would like to state why I think that the positivity of teaching a non-native
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 from a young age would create benefits for
children
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. One of the biggest concerns of learning a foreign
language
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 from youth is that
students
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 will achieve less knowledge in other fields. In
Japan
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, the ministry of literature decides the
education
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 outline of public primary schools, and have set the limits for each subject that public
school
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 can teach their student. In order to teach a foreign
language
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, public elementary schools have to cut other courses. Usually in
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 scenario, most schools cut music courses and many
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 end up knowing less about music.
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, many critics are fearing that
students
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 might lose some knowledge by acquiring a foreign
language
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, which I think is not true. The positivities
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 are obviously that elementary
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children
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 would be capable of using a foreign
language
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.
Japan
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 is one nation
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 promoting foreign
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education
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. Decades before,
English
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 courses were not conducted during primary
education
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,
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, nowadays
children
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 start learning
English
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 from the age of 6.
Children
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 today in
Japan
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 are way more talented in using
English
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 than those 10 years ago. A recent study
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 shows that
children
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 who started their foreign
language
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education
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 from their primary age tend to have higher IQs than those
students
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 who did not.
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 means that by adding foreign
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 classes to the primary
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 program,
students
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 will get smarter and will enhance the effectiveness of elementary
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education
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. In conclusion, I believe that teaching foreign languages in elementary
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 is appropriate because the positivities of teaching foreign languages exceed the negativities.
Children
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 might lose some time to study certain subjects by substituting classes for foreign
language
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 classes, but
students
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 would get much smarter and their ability to understand would be enhanced and creating more benefits overall.
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