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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SPACE EXPLORATION IS A WASTE OF RESOURCES, WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT IT IS ESSENTIAL FOR MANKIND TO CONTINUE TO EXPLORE THE UNIVERSE IN WHICH WE LIVE. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR VALUABLE OPINION.

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Nowadays, there is a controversy about
space
 exploration,
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which
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many people think that exploring
space
 is a waste of time, money and resources,
while
 others say that it is important to explore the universe in which we live. In
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,
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essay I will explain both views and give my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand, a number of individuals believe that the government should explore
space
 to find new things
such
 as new stars and planets where humans can live because there are numerous threats in outer
space
. To explain, in the Jurassic
era
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 dinosaurs vanished by a meteoroid that
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 from
space
.
In addition
, these days the level of pollution
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 increased significantly, which affects the environment and in the near future humans and animals will not be able to live on
earth
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. Because of these
reasons
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 they believe that it is necessary to explore
space
.
On the other hand
, the population deem that these types of missions do not have much
succusses
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 rate and the cost to send rockets and satellites is in the billions,
due to
 the lower achievement rate and the higher cost they disagree with it.
Moreover
, the authorities have a defence system that can protect the world from outer
space
 objects like meteoroids.
In addition
, the rulers should spend money on improving current facilities
such
 as transportation, hospitalities and education. In conclusion, in my opinion,
space
 exploration is necessary as there are a lot of threats and finding out about our solar system is important.
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task response
Make sure to address both viewpoints in a balanced manner, providing detailed arguments for each side.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas to create a more coherent essay. Use linking words to connect your ideas and develop a clear and logical structure.

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  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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