Many people believe that good planning is the key factor to success in life, while others believe that other factors like hard work or luck are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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successful

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life. Some believe that good planning is the key to

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others

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is not possible without hard work or

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to be successful,

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, doctors have to work hard on themselves because it is not possible to be a doctor without knowledge.

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, if patients have serious

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, doctors with

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of knowledge never can help them to get rid of

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problem but even worse, be the cause of their death.

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, athletes without hard work and

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can not be the winners of their sports

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, with planning, things could have gone even better because with ideas and

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we can get even more profit.

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, football games couldn't be played without planning every move and strategy, and that's why all football teams need a coach .

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, without planning we can't imagine how directors could have run their firms because it takes responsibility and thinking deeply. In conclusion, I agree that planning would be useful in running corporations and firms but without hard

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it is not possible to make plans real, but just keep it deep inside.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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4 paragraphs

252 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

success
good planning
goals
objectives
allocation of resources
uncertainty
productivity
hard work
diligence
perseverance
skill development
continuous improvement
challenges
setbacks
luck
opportunities
favorable circumstances
outcome
personal opinion
crucial
unpredictable
remain open

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