Many people believe that good planning is the key factor to success in life, while others believe that other factors like hard work or luck are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is said that there are various
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ways which
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to
successful
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life. Some believe that good planning is the key to
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life
while
others
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that
this
is not possible without hard work or
luck
. I agree with
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that people have to
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to be successful,
however
,
this
is not possible without hard
working
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and with
little
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bit of
luck
.
To begin
with, people who wanted to become a main character in their society.
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, doctors have to work hard on themselves because it is not possible to be a doctor without knowledge.
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, if patients have serious
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, doctors with
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of knowledge never can help them to get rid of
this
problem but even worse, be the cause of their death.
Moreover
, athletes without hard work and
luck
can not be the winners of their sports
On the other hand
, with planning, things could have gone even better because with ideas and
plans
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we can get even more profit.
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, football games couldn't be played without planning every move and strategy, and that's why all football teams need a coach .
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, without planning we can't imagine how directors could have run their firms because it takes responsibility and thinking deeply. In conclusion, I agree that planning would be useful in running corporations and firms but without hard
working
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and with
little
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bit of
luck
it is not possible to make plans real, but just keep it deep inside.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • success
  • good planning
  • goals
  • objectives
  • allocation of resources
  • uncertainty
  • productivity
  • hard work
  • diligence
  • perseverance
  • skill development
  • continuous improvement
  • challenges
  • setbacks
  • luck
  • opportunities
  • favorable circumstances
  • outcome
  • personal opinion
  • crucial
  • unpredictable
  • remain open
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