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Task 2 Academic In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In
this
 modern time where everything almost goes online, printed newspapers or
books
are become
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 less purchased since
people
 can now read anything they want without having to pay. I would disagree with
this
 statement because there are still a lot of
people
 who loved physical
books
 or newspapers and reading online could lead to distractions in some ways.
Firstly
, printed
books
 are much more enjoyable when it comes to
fulfill
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 one's reading hobby. The feeling of holding
books
, flipping through
its
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their
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 pages, and
smelled
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 the paper are a great pleasure for the reader.
Hence
, the cost of a physical book
considered
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 to be worth the joy it brings. There are
also
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alternative
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of
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to
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 reading
in
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printed papers if one's can not
afford
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, they can borrow
the
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a
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 copy from
library
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.
Secondly
,
i
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 believe reading online can be less entertaining. The main cause was
because
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that
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 the device used for doing the task is
also
 the one that
people
 use for communicating,
hence
 their reading time can be distracted by the incoming notifications. It is
also
 a big issue that
people
 who
reads
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 the screen will experience
a tired eyes
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 due to
it's
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 light.
Finally
,
i
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I
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 personally think that regardless of the easier and
sophisticated
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more sophisticated
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 way of getting information,
people
 will still go with printed reading materials.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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