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Air transport is increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good but other believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 has become a global village due to the advancements in technology. Fruits and vegetables are transported to different parts of the world by air. Some
group
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 of individuals agree with
this
 way of transporting food
items
 while others disagree.
This
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 of
views
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 and will give a valid opinion in the end. On the one hand, there are myriad benefits of using air transport for fresh fruits and vegetables.
To begin
 with, cargo planes are the quickest means of transporting food
items
 to other countries.
This
 has made it
possibles
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 for
the
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people around the globe to
recieve
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receive
 fresh and healthy food
items
.
For example
,
canada's
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 weather is not suitable for the growth of the majority of fruits and vegetables.
Inspite
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 of
this
,
public
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 in
canada
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Canada
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 can find any type of fresh
items
 in their markets due to fast means of transportation.
Furthermore
,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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