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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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These days, migration and tourism are two common ways to travel to a foreign country. For many
people
, it is hard to keep up with a new
language
;
therefore
,
people
 have to deal with not solely severe social
problems
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but
also
 face with practical
problems
. I tend to agree with
this
 opinion, and in
this
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problems
 is cultural shock.
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 barrier is a cause of
this
 issue. Many
people
 found it
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very difficult to make friends when leaving in a foreign country, conversations are not just about food and weather, these contain
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 that
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 complex vocabulary. Some
people
 said that in spite of having linguistic qualifications, they still have
problems
 when talking with native speakers.
As a result
, they usually do not develop good relationships with local citizens and prefer to stay
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 of their own community.
For example
, my friend who study abroad in Canada, despite
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gaining
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 level
of
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said she was nervous when she have to debate
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 with native students. Another reason for my belief is that the inability
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local
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language
 may limit
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 opportunities. Getting a job in
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a foreigns
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foreigns
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language
require
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 a high level of fluency in
language
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the language
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, even in work as
lowpaid
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low paid
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. So
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, many immigrants are
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affected
 by financial
difficuties
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difficulties
. Another problem relates to
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 activities. If you have little or no knowledge of the local
language
, it may be difficult to understand the contents of packaged goods,
such
 as tins or cartons of food, or their cooking instructions, causing
people
 to follow a limited diet. It is widely accepted that nowadays, with the development of technology,
people
 could
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 an alternative tool
such
 as Google
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 to
cummunicate
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communicate
 with local
people
, but it
inconvinient
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inconvenient
. To sum up, I agree that living in a country with poor access to the local
language
 is challenging both socially and practically.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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