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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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people
peole
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people
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learn
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learn
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programme
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programs
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however
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persons
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assume that it can not bring
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profit as much attend to
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 or universities . l think it is more effective
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study
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the pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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. In the upcoming
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 l will share my personal view Nowadays most people who live in abroad countries
study
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pupils
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lesson
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by
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 professional teachers.
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, they may teach
pupil
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pupils
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in
school
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schools
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 or
unversity
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university
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located
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long
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a long
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 distance from
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the pupiles
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pupiles
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pupils
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house
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 and
also
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another
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 people.
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school
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 so
this
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school
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However
, I prefer to
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afford
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school
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a village
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village
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villages
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 or small
town
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towns
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 has always
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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of
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internet
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the internet
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 so the
study
of
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online
do
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 not suitable
them
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 .
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" infection in our country ,
this
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 the air,
all
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 students had to use distance learning
program
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programs
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, the
result
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the education system quality is down .
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 some
pupils
 even did not
study
instead
 of it they worked, the results
are show
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that
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Uzbekistan do not ready to
study
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anyway
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 l prefer to learn
face- to -face
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. In conclusion , the
study
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more
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better than
other
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way
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 in any situation cause
of
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this
 the teachers can control their
pupils
as well as
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, as well as pupils,
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pupils
 can get
lesson
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 well.
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