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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it can not bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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human beings opt
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 study at home rather than going college or
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. I
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 of the same mind with
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 conversation
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 nonnegotiable. To explain, it is true that
paper based
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 study is an old modus operandi. In
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 twenty-
first
-century
people
 are keen to replace it with internet resources.
Furthermore
, online learning is free from hardship, as they will get accomplishment. For
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instance
, many individuals have duties at home so they
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 a loss to attend college or university but they can carry out their online
class
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classes
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 according to their schedules.
On the other hand
, it is clear that online education can not take the place of the old tactic of teaching. As these changes can disadvan- tageous have
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 impact on their interpersonal skills,
such
 as socializing and cooperation with the contemporary. In
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 face-to-face communication is of the essence for the students. Due to
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 they supplement more expertness and will become a satis- factory leader and speaker in the future. For
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,
people
 who can not
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 with other
people
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will turn to
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 of confidence, due to which
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sabotage
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their line of work opportunities. In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 be of the opinion
online
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 studying is beneficial for the passport holder. In
regards
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, I have confidence
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that students should be
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taught
tought
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taught
 at
university
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universities
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 and other academic
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in
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tutions
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nations
, as
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, distance learning can not replace the old modus operandi.
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