Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, with the advancement of technology, some groups of humans would opine that movies, which are released on online platforms are easily available
which
can replace Correct word choice
and
the
Correct article usage
apply
cinemas
. The new streaming services
become more popular just because of accessibility at
anywhere and anytime and Change preposition
apply
also
it
have fewer expenses compared to theatres.
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they
To begin
with
the prime reason why Add a comma
with,
cinemas
are becoming irrelevant because
of new streaming Add a missing verb
is because
services
, on various online websites, newly released movies and series are uploaded and after the launching those on that
, anyone can watch those at Correct pronoun usage
apply
comfortable
place and Add an article
a comfortable
also
anytime. In other words
, on online platforms, if any movie is released, people can download it and they can see it in their spare time and at their convenient location. On the other hand
, if people prefer to watch it in cinemas
, they have to go there as per the show-timing and also
there is the possibility of facing some issues related to sitting areas and sound system.
Secondly
, the new streaming services
provide some offers in their premiums. Also
, in these premiums, more than one movie can be watched because they can give monthly, quarterly and yearly subscriptions. For example
, Hotstar, Amazon Prime, etcetera. In contrast
, in cinemas
, if anyone buys one ticket, he/she would watch only that particular movie. The price of a ticket of theatre is almost equal to the 2 to 3 months
subscription plan of streaming Correct your spelling
3-month
services
. Hence
, online platforms are more relevant compared to cinemas
.
In conclusion, as per the above-mentioned reasons such
as convenient place and time and affordable cost, the new streaming services
are replacing the cinemas
and I totally agree with the given statement.Submitted by rahulgpatel19 on
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