Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, there are many large companies which have their business in the
city
. So, young
people
have no choice but to leave the rural area and move to urban
cities
to seek job opportunities and have a better standard of living. And, no one looks after the old
people
, and
this
is causing them health issues.
To begin
with, many young adults often tend to shift to urban
areas
once they complete their education. And the most prominent reason for
this
is the lack of employment opportunities in rural
areas
. While urban
areas
are developed it has a lot to offer like well-paying jobs,
comfortable
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lifestyle, better education and much more which encourages
the
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youngsters to leave remote
areas
and settle in big
cities
.
For example
, working with
same
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bank job, if you work in a big
city
, the salary will be from three times to four times higher than in the countryside, but the daily cost of living is just over one and a half times, which makes young
people
feel more comfortable living in the
city
and especially they can travel everywhere with the remaining money, which is difficult to do if working in other.
On the other hand
, moving into crowded
cities
is considered a key factor that might lead
us
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to global warming. The main reason given to support
this
claim is that living in major
cities
is one of the main contributing factors
of
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pollution.
For instance
, large urban regions have a lot of public transportation, which is usually associated with an increment in degrees of temperature and ratio of pollution.
Hence
,
such
an effect would increase the global warming risk.
In addition
, old folks who don’t want to move to the big
city
,
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just want to live where they were born, so their children can only leave them in the countryside where a lack of childcare and a shortage of hospitals will impair the health of the elderly, possibly leading to sensitization for them. In
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conclusion, rural life has gradually lost its popularity over a period of three decades. Youth prefer to live in
cities
and towns due to attractive opportunities and the trend is resulting in overpopulation as a problem
,
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and the demise of agriculture.
However
, the government can address these problems related to population and agriculture by investing in rural
areas
in
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young
people
to
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have a desire for rural life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • economic opportunities
  • urban areas
  • rural industries
  • cultural heritage
  • overpopulation
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
  • neglect
  • workforce
  • traditional cultures
  • customs
  • pollution
  • support systems
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