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The local council is planning to create ‘dispersal zones’ in certain areas of the city to try to reduce street fighting. what is your opinion?

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Nowadays the regent is planning to create dispersal zones in certain areas of the city to try to decrease street flighting and they can
also
 remove people who do live in the area and arrest them.
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, they added to the
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 that after nine, teenagers and children cannot leave the house.
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 to cut the risk of teen.
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, someone who wants to go in any way,can find an exit and continue the crime,
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. I propose a more efficient idea, we can install cameras and with
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 we can easily find out when and who the crime was.
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, if there is a crime with someone, we can easily find criminals and only arrest them. Why it is
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 idea? Because in my opinion,it would be better to arrest only criminals and others who are far from it, who do not care
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 nothing to do.Because if all teenagers and children will not leave the house because of some criminal teenagers. In conclusion, I want that other teens to be hurt too, whoever it doesn't concern , I guess teens from other teens who are criminals shouldn't suffer.
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