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e-books is more popular than traditional ones. Are you agree or disagree?

The bar chart provides a comparison of the proportion of
time
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 that
parents
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 in Australia spent
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assisting their
children
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 with four activities in 2013. Overall, mothers attended more frequently than
fathers
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 in all pursuits.
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, while
parents
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 together spent the highest proportion on playing
games
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 with their offspring,
fathers
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 liked to help with their
children
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's assignments and preparing
clothes
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was
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mothers's
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 favourite preserve Regarding mothers, changing
clothes
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 constituted nearly 75%, followed by homework and bed-making, at around 50% and 42% respectively. The lowest
time
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 allotted by female
parents
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 was playing
games
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, at 25%. Concerning
fathers
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, the proportion of
fathers
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 who assisted their offspring with their school homework was 10%, around 5 times higher than that of choosing
clothes
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. Playing
games
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 and preparing for bed shared an identical figure, at approximately 4% each.
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, both
parents
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 as a team spent 70% of their
time
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 playing
games
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 with their
children
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 whereas the figure for
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a bed-time
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bed-
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bedtime
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time
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 activity for their
children
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 was 50%. the percentages of
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 allocated for assignments and changing
clothes
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 by both
parents
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 were lower, at around 39% and roughly 21%

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