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Some people think that offenders should be put in prison. Others, however, believe that providing offenders with education and training is more effective than putting them in prison. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Generally, we are used to thinking, that everyone, who commits a crime must be in jail. But there are
people
, which opinions differ slightly They believe, that offenders can have
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 chance, so educational programs would be more effective than traditional punishments. Nowadays when the mind of mankind is wider, many
people
 start to offer ways for real correction and comprehension of actions, unlike just sitting in prison. It would be useful for
criminals
 as well as for society.
Furthermore
, staying in prison could cause psychological problems,because
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they will feel regret, anger, or revenge. Especially if they were wrongly judged or were beaten or murdered there. As you know, many
people
 have died, which is
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 I support correctional education.
Nevertheless
, a sizeable part of
people
 is still of the opinion, that
criminals
 should be punished in prison. In fact,
people
 who have killed,
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,
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 to justify or forgive.
Moreover
, offenders would continue to commit crimes if they are free. To sum up, as I see it,
criminals
 must be ranked according to crime degree. Not all offenders worth to be at freedom. And
people
 should evaluate their situation or actions so that
criminals
 can reform.
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