Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although
people believed that harsher punishment
reduces criminal
, other individuals think that there are more efficient ways to stop scandals. I believe that a lengthy period of incarceration would be more fitting. Some people believe that longer Replace the word
crime
prison
terms are preferable because they keep criminals
off the streets and stop them and others from committing crimes
as frequently, and I agree with them. In other words
, violent offenders who are imprisoned for a number of years are given more time to reflect on their lives and change for the better. Additionally
, increasing prison
sentences serves as a discouragement to those who might want to commit similar horrible crimes
. For instance
, since those responsible for such
crimes
are given life in prison
, the number of rapists has significantly decreased. Thus
, this
has contributed to a decrease in the frequency of crime
. Furthermore
, continued punishment
ensures that society
is properly protected. That is
to say, when criminals
who are a threat to the
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apply
society
are convicted to longer
years in jail it would return peace and harmony back to Replace the word
long
the
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apply
society
. Therefore
, reducing the incidence of reported
heinous Add an article
a reported
the reported
crime
. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Beside
that, it is frequently held that it is preferable if the emphasis is placed on creating a larger Replace the word
Besides
society
as opposed to punishment
. This
is due to the fact that keeping a prison
for an extended period of time can be extremely expensive, and the burden is frequently placed on tax paying
citizens. The justice system should Add a hyphen
tax-paying
therefore
focus on the ways that criminals
benefit society
rather than the other way around. This
program decreased the crime
rate because, for instance
, if one individual stole property, he would spend 30 days in an orphanage with foreign children who had lost everything. Another factor is that prisons concentrate punishment
rather than programs for training and rehabilitation. There should be other, more effective ways to train and provide tools for villains to improve their character. so reducing Change preposition
on punishment
crime
from
Change preposition
in
society
. In conclusion, even though people's opinions may differ. I believe that convicting criminals
for a long period of time is more beneficial since it deters future crimes
and restores peace and tranquility
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tranquillity
to
the community.Change preposition
in
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