Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people believed that harsher
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, other individuals think that there are more efficient ways to stop scandals. I believe that a lengthy period of incarceration would be more fitting. Some people believe that longer
prison
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terms are preferable because they keep
criminals
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off the streets and stop them and others from committing
crimes
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as frequently, and I agree with them.
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, violent offenders who are imprisoned for a number of years are given more time to reflect on their lives and change for the better.
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, increasing
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sentences serves as a discouragement to those who might want to commit similar horrible
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.
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, since those responsible for
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crimes
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are given life in
prison
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, the number of rapists has significantly decreased.
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,
this
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has contributed to a decrease in the frequency of
crime
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.
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, continued
punishment
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ensures that
society
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is properly protected.
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to say, when
criminals
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who are a threat to
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are convicted to
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years in jail it would return peace and harmony back to
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society
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.
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, reducing the incidence of
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heinous
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crime
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.
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that, it is frequently held that it is preferable if the emphasis is placed on creating a larger
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as opposed to
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.
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is due to the fact that keeping a
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for an extended period of time can be extremely expensive, and the burden is frequently placed on
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citizens. The justice system should
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focus on the ways that
criminals
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benefit
society
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rather than the other way around.
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program decreased the
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rate because,
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, if one individual stole property, he would spend 30 days in an orphanage with foreign children who had lost everything. Another factor is that prisons concentrate
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punishment
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rather than programs for training and rehabilitation. There should be other, more effective ways to train and provide tools for villains to improve their character. so reducing
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society
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. In conclusion, even though people's opinions may differ. I believe that convicting
criminals
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for a long period of time is more beneficial since it deters future
crimes
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and restores peace and
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to
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the community.
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