Some people say that too much attention and many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people have a notion that
wildlife
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receive
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receives

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a great deal of attention and
resources
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in
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the preserve

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preserve
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. I believe that not only do the
animals
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and birds not have too much surveillance and
resources
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in
preserve
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the preserve

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but
also
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they suffer from insufficiency in
this
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regard since they play a key role in
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the economic
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economic
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economy

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and environment which
i
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I

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discuss as
follow
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follows

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:
In addition
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to humans,
wildlife
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have
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has

The plural verb have does not appear to agree with the singular subject wildlife. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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some
right
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rights

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such
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as accommodation,
not
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and not

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being haunted by humans.
Although
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such
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preserves and facilities are provided for them partially, a large number of
wildlife
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are on the verge of extinction or death.
For instance
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, annually a myriad of them are killed by humans for their meat or skin means enough
policy
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policies

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of taking care
and
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of and

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providing
resources
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are
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is

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not adopted.
In addition
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, it is important to protect
wildlife
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even
a
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though a

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great number of
cost
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costs

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and care have to be taken. What
i
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I

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mean to say is that
animals
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are effective for
economy
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the economy
an economy

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in terms of either providing products like eggs,
milk
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and milk

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, or eating weeds. Many Farmers make a living
through
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by

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selling these yields. In the
end
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,end

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these sales compound the income of
country
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the country
a country

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.
Besides
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,
instead
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of burning weeds, their crops are
prune
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pruned

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by animal grazing which is
also
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beneficial for
environment
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the environment

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.
Therefore
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, too much attention and too many
resources
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should be dedicated
in
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to

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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

protection
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the protection

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of
animals
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and birds. Overall, while some people claim that too much care and facilities are given
in
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to

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Use synonyms

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protection
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the protection

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of
animals
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and birds, in my
opinion
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,opinion

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cares
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care

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and sources
in
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for

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Use synonyms

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protection
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the protection

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of
wildlife
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are insufficient and because they are economically and environmentally useful,
such
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attention and facilities in
protection
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should be more.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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