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Write a letter to your manager about your work from last year. Include What you did What you think you could improve A training request

#manager #work #year #request
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Dear Mr John, I just writing you
let
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 you know that I would like to submit for
annual
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self appraisal
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 report. Over
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last
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 twelve months, I have had
a good
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a good sale record
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sale
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 records
on
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the
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apply
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agriculture products which
over
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 the
sale
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 target. As a
team
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 leader, I established two
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sale
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sales
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 teams with separate products. They
was
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 focused on their own products with targeted
customers
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.
Firstly
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, each
team
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 leader are finding out the
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customers
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customer's
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 requirement and they have
contacted
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to
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customers
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 via phone, email or
face to face
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meeting
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. I am tracking the
team
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 activities daily.
As a result
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, the total
sale
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 volume has
been
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increased end of
this
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 year.
Additionally
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, I used the
team
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’s tracking and monitoring application
with
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on
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computer
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a computer
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 or mobile so that it is easy to
knowing
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know
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 the
update
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 information between my
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sale
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sales
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 teams and
customers
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. I could manage the
team
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 well.
However
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,
it
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I
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 would be very grateful if you could arrange the marketing training for me and my teams from
professional
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a professional
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 marketing university. So, we can
expend
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expand
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 our company business which is using the new marketing methods after we learnt from training. I
am look
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 forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Susi
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