Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
the
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modern life, many
people
believe that
telephone
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dominate
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our life. Some
people
think that the use of
mobile
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phone
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phones
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in public should be banned, but
others
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people
disagree. In
this
essay, I will explore both points and explain why mobile
phones
arenʼt limiting. On the one hand, talking on the
phone
in public places attracts a lot of
peopleʼs
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people's
attention.
This
is mainly due to the volume of the
phone
ringingand
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ringing and
ringing
the volume of the disturbers. Many
people
may not like
this
.
For example
, if
people
are in some mosques or churches. Suddenly
someoneʼs
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someone's
phone
rings loudly
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if
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cause
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everyoneʼs
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everyone's
attention and
breaks
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their concentration.
Therefore
,
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phones
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are requested to be turned off when visiting mosques or churches.
On the other hand
,there are many
people
who donʼt agree with the idea of banning mobile
phones
in any situation. Often referred to as the use of mobile
phones
for important calls.
Besides
, today
mnay
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many
people
live
for
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from their families and they need a
phone
to talk to them. Often
people
cannot refuse calls from family and have to answer them. Because
,
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the calls from them may have been to tell some news. For
exmaple
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example
,if their family members went to a competition and won there, they will
definitly
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definitely
about tell it by calling.
Therefore
, answering calls to mobile
phones
is important. In a nutshell, some
people
believe that they do important work on a mobile
phone
. Some
people
are completely against
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our life easier and we cannot ignore it. I donʼt agree with banning mobile
phone
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. I propose
to teach
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people
how to use a mobile
phone
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disrupt
  • Infringe
  • Social rudeness
  • Public transport
  • Necessity
  • Convenience
  • Emergencies
  • Personal freedom
  • Designated areas
  • Compromise
  • Context
  • Advocating
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