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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is widely opined that the increasing trend of online shopping will completely replace physical shops. I completely disagree with
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 notion.
Body paragraph 1
It is common these days for
people
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 of all ages in general and young
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in particular
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, that they are leaning towards online purchases and
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 is because it saves a lot of their
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. The growing population and an increasing number of vehicles on roads result in massive traffic jams.
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,
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 do not want to waste their
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 and prefer to shop from different websites
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, without having stuck in traffic congestion.
Body paragraph 2
Despite the benefit of saving
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, physical buying could not be stopped. One main reason why I think it is important is it leads the majority of
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 to inner satisfaction. Quite a few
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, do not satisfy with the purchase until they check all the variety which is being sold in various shops.
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, if I consider myself, I always buy a particular piece of clothing after having a trial of it multiple times to check whether it suits me or not.
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, I get a chance to inspect the quality of the fabric as well the stitching.
Body paragraph 3
What’s more, since the routine of
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 has now become more hectic than ever before,
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 going shopping seems to have a sort of an outing for them.
People
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, especially those who are office-going, come back home at night. As a consequence, they usually get tired and hardly fetch
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 to do activities.
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, they often spare themselves to visit malls for shopping to have some fun with their family and rejuvenate their minds.
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, according to research conducted in the UK, a significant boost in the energy level of
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, from 30 per cent to 70 per cent, was observed when they took to shop for clothes after their office.
Conclusion
In conclusion, brick-and-mortar shops are going to be obsolete in the upcoming days because of a rise in virtual shopping. I don’t think
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 will happen because the physical buying of clothes provides
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 with a sense of inner satisfaction and a refreshing outing.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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