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i. #Globalization | #ForeignTrade - Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? (IELTS 10, AC)

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The map below shows the difference between Nelson park in 2000 and today. In general, there are some huge changes in the
city
, especially in the port
area
 and
also
 in the right part of the
city
. One of the major changes is the port
area
. In
the
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2000
this
 part of the town lacked the facilities and only had the beach.
However
, in recent years it had changed,
in
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the port
area
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,area
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 there were introduced restaurants, bars and clubs.
Moreover
, the road, which separates the major part of the
city
 from the beach, became
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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 one.
In addition
 to
this
, the place for the market was changed and now it has become covered, on the old
market place
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marketplace
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 the government settled a new shop. In the
city
center
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centre
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 was introduced a bike rental scheme
.
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was.
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 The new train station became a new facility in the
city
.
Furthermore
, the trees were cut down and in
this
area
 was
settled
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a settled
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 new shopping centre. In the left wing of the
city
 was built a hall of residence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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