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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correcf place. What is your opinion about this?

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It is
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 that keeping your personal and
work
 space clean is good for
life
. I strongly support
this
 idea because a tidy place is not only
is
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beneficial to
productivity
,
life
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 quality is
also
 largely affected by the environment you are in.
To begin
 with, the environment can affect
productivity
. It is much easier to look for things you want in an organized place, whereas you will waste a lot of time searching for things in a messy room, which is not helpful for
productivity
 at all.
In addition
, when the room is tidy and organized, your mind will be clear too. A telling story is about a Japanese designer I admire - Yakusa Nori. He is
one
 of the top designers in the world. I read an article where he was asked about how he can keep producing
high quality
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design
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. His recommendation was to always start with a clean desk every time you kick off a project. He believes that an empty desk is full of potential and inspiration.
Moreover
, it is a new norm for people to
work
 remotely in the 21st century. When the line between
work
 and personal
life
 starts to blur at home, it has become even more important to keep your place organized. Separating
work
 and daily
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 space is
a
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trending tip researchers recommend to anyone who needs to
work
 at home. It helps your brain to switch
context
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 and be more focused on
one
 task over another. More than anything,
work
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work-life
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life
 balance is essential for our happiness. To conclude, having a tidy and organized space to live and
work
is
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one
 of the best things you can do to improve your
life
. On the
one
 hand, it increases
productivity
.
On the other hand
, it keeps you and your family balanced and happy. I truly believe there are many positive impacts associated with it.
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