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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 theory appears to be an important factor in how
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 choose
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. A group of
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 who only consider making
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 with the same attitude and there are other
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 who are more open to different thoughts. I strongly believe we need to have
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 who could bring different perspectives to conversations. It is no doubt that making
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 who share the same common interests is easier and it brings a good feeling when you are surrounded by common interests peers. Mentally, positive feedback received from talking to
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 can be very helpful. Having
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 who support you increases your confidence level which is critical for self-development. Unfortunately, always being around
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 who have the exact same point of view can have many risks associated with it. Always hearing the same idea means always staying in your comfort zone. Research shows we need to step out of the zone in order to learn new knowledge.
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, talking to those folks doesn't really help with growing.
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, it might result in carrying a big ego because you couldn't accept
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 feeling anymore. It often causes relationship breakdown. I truly believe it's much more beneficial to have
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 who bring perspectives from multiple angles. When I hear folk bring
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, I'd
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 of all, really appreciate their honesty because it takes courage to express themselves.
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, thank them to give me chance to reflect on my own bias and decision. It is extremely helpful to think from both sides and understand where they come from because the world is not black and white. We often need to make compromise decisions which in fact is the best decision. In summary,
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 there are benefits to choosing
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 who always have the same viewpoint as them, I would argue that we need to encourage
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 to have
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 who sometimes disagree with them. It is the best way for self-growth and development, as well as for making better decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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