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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel ( gas and oil). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Traditional cultures are shared experiences that are transferred from generation to generation.
People
 have varied opinions on the legend cultures and their existence. While some
people
believes
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 that it is ruined as a money-making system in front of
tourists
, others opine that it is the one and only way to protect our
culture
. On the one side, there are clear arguments against exploiting
culture
 for tourist attractions.
To begin
 with, many businesses modify the actual customs in order to attract
tourists
.
Hence
, the original version of it is losing its prominence and
subside
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.
As a result
, the audience will not understand the exact
culture
, and that's how the
culture
 gets ruined by money.
In contrast
,
people
's habits are one of the strongest marks that define any nation. and
that is
 why every nation should do its best to keep it.
otherwise
, there will not be any difference between any country and another. That's why attracting
tourists
 throughout
culture
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 is suggested that it is the only way to save
culture
 from being disappeared.
This
 is because if
people
 are not making renovations
for
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 old buildings and other traditional things, they are more likely to collapse by the damage of natural disasters. What is more, by doing
this
 action,
tourists
 will be more interested in our cultures as well as getting more dollars.
Therefore
, it can be a win-win situation. To conclude, I support that taking advantage of the community's
culture
 for attracting more foreigners to make money is the only and the best way to protect
this
culture
 from fading away.
in addition
, it has a huge effect on the country's economy and leads to prosperity.
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