When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. Do you agree and disagree with this statement?
In
this
contemporary epoch, modern technologies have created noticeable
impact on traditional Add an article
a noticeable
skills
and ways of living life
and it
Correct pronoun usage
they
also
affected people
`s mindset of living. This
disquisition will discuss, whether it is pointless to keep alive the ways of life
or not, and I will discuss my opinion in conclusion.
To commence with, it is always been seen that new technology brings various changes in human life
, people
tend to waste more time
or some technologies saves
more Correct subject-verb agreement
save
time
. For example
, smartphone
is Add an article
the smartphone
a smartphone
the
device which Correct article usage
a
do
both, saves valuable Change the verb form
does
time
when used on
needy purposes, at the same Change preposition
for
time
it also
wastes time
of many youngsters as it is very addictive. Add an article
the time
In addition
, somewhere the importance of traditional objects, skills
or ways of living life
has been lowered due to new inventions, individuals
follow new Correct word choice
and individuals
culture
blindly, Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
for example
, as
Correct word choice
apply
people
follow new trends on social media and they acquire new fashion
which Fix the agreement mistake
fashions
are
trending in social platforms.
Change the verb form
is
Moreover
, new tech gadgets brings
positive change, in some aspects like agriculture, industries, and Change the verb form
bring
the
machines, which replaced manual tasks and physical energy. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, the internet changed the way of communication, for example
, relatives used to visit others but nowadays people
have
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apply
chat
on the phone or call someone whenever they remember someone. To add to it, Fix the infinitive
to chat
this
can be the reason why traditional skills
are expiring due to mordanization
.
In conclusion, it is undeniable thatCorrect your spelling
modernisation
,
due to modern technology traditional Remove the comma
apply
skills
are forgotten, but somewhere it is advantageous for people
because it saves precious time
and works as a helping hand.Submitted by rahulgpatel19 on
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