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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With the advancement of
technology
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, any
country
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’s culture, traditional
skills
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 and
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 the style of living
life
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 change drastically. Some believe that the traditional way of
life
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 is not that much important. For surviving and competing with the world and
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 for the development of any
country
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, technological developments are necessary.
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 with, many reasons why traditional
skills
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 are easily replaced by technological
skills
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. One major reason is that accuracy and time-saving.
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, in the past centuries, all the work was done by humans and it took too much time,
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 there was more possibility of mistakes and inaccuracy. Nowadays, with the advancement of
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, various type of machines is used for doing any task. With the help of these machines, the task is completed with perfection and at an accurate time.
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, the concrete mixer is used for maxing the materials used in making concrete for the construction of any structure. In
this
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 machine, all the ingredients mix properly and during a short time period. For making concrete, more workforce is required in traditional methods, while using concrete mixers, becomes easier.
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, the cultural way of
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 and traditional
skills
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 never be useful for surviving and competing with the world. It means any
country
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 have to learn various advanced
technology
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.
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, during wartime, for protecting any
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, it is necessary to have advanced equipment and
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 weapons. Any
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 cannot fight and survive with traditional methods.
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, for the development of any developing nation, some traditional
skills
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 and ways of
life
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 should be left behind the technological
skills
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. In conclusion, in recent centuries,
technology
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 is one of the basic needs for the development of any developing
country
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 and because of that a
country
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 changes their culture and ways of
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, it is acceptable. I totally agree with the given statement.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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