Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is no doubt about the fact that

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music

plays an essential role in

individual's

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life.

However

, it is believed by some masses that

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people of district customs and ages together from all over the world. I agree with

this

statement and shall explain

this

in upcoming paragraphs. On the

one

hand, the

first

and perhaps the most important reason behind

this

is that

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folks are fond of

melody

and they

listen

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it

everyday

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. In brief, the

music

industry makes

number

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of

songs

every year,so

one

can enjoy tunes

everyday

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in order to release stress.

Furthermore

,

older

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generation

opt

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to

listen

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old

songs

like classical and traditional,while the youth

is find

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interest in rock or pop

songs

.

Thus

, every age group's people play the song,and

all

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population dance

with

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it regardless of their age and enjoy the

music

.

In addition

to

this

,

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,

the

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music

producers create

the

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remix

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strains of old and new

songs

,

therefore

,

one

can enjoy

such

kind of

melody

by

listening

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it

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them

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. Moving forward,

in

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these days, owing to

advancement

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of technology, everyone has their own devices

such

as mobile

phone

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phones

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,

laptop

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laptops

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or

computer

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computers

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,

hence

it is very convenient for individuals to

listen

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songs

of

different

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culture

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cultures

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. It is observed that teenagers are very interested in listening

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to english

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english

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and

punjabi

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melody

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. By doing

this

one

not

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only aware

about

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of

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different languages,but

also

it helps them to learn other languages.

Moreover

, many

singars

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singers

have done international concerts, and

plethora

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of youngsters attend

these kind

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of

music

events.

Therefore

, it would be fruitful to bring masses of

different

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a different

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culture

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cultures

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. In conclusion, from the aforementioned points, it is aptly seen that

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music

is the best way to combine people

of

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from

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other countries and cultures.