Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals ? Is it a positive or negative trend ?
In
this
modern world, more and more society
believe that Fix the agreement mistake
societies
competitive
is the main aspect which can give several benefits for individuals' development. In my perspective, a strict world could Replace the word
competition
affect
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cause
people
to work harder and more
creative in every Add a missing verb
be more
conditions
.
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condition
To begin
with, living in a tight competitive world tends to force someone to be more productive and innovative in every situation since more and more people
can easily success
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succeed
due to
their ambitious
. If someone is lazy and does not care about anything, he can be far behind Replace the word
ambition
from
Change preposition
apply
the
others and can not reach something. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, when other people
more
Add a missing verb
are more
success
, he still Replace the word
successful
enjoy
his middle-class Correct subject-verb agreement
enjoys
economy
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economic
life
. Thus
, if he want
to live like ordinary Change the verb form
wants
people
, he should improve his life
to be high-valued
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a high-valued
life
. For example
, someone who has a small business change
her business from Change the verb form
changes
traditional
system to the online one because of the appearance of online Correct article usage
a traditional
shoppings
.
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shopping
In addition
, in my point of view, several society
who are very ambitious to through their Change to a plural noun
societies
live
would give positive development to their Replace the word
lives
life
since they can build great habit
that Fix the agreement mistake
habits
success
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successful
people
usually done
. Wrong verb form
do
For instance
, they get up at
early morning, go to the office or their business, create several brilliant ideas and they become a Change preposition
apply
hard-worker
person Correct your spelling
hard-working
everyday
. Replace the word
every day
Those habit
can boost their self-development, Change the determiner
That habit
Those habits
as
a Correct word choice
and as
result
they can easily become Add the comma(s)
result,
a
loaded Correct article usage
apply
people
. Fix the agreement mistake
person
Hence
, the more strict their life
is, the more good for their daily habit.
To sum up
, I believe that competitiveness is a great atmosphere for boosting humans'
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human'
life
quality. Since it can give
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apply
positive
influence individuals to be more creative and innovative, Change the word
positively
hence
they can be a person who live in high Rephrase
apply
economical
value.Correct word choice
economic
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