Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals ? Is it a positive or negative trend ?

In
this
modern world, more and more
society
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believe that
competitive
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is the main aspect which can give several benefits for individuals' development. In my perspective, a strict world could
affect
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people
to work harder and
more
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be more
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creative in every
conditions
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.
To begin
with, living in a tight competitive world tends to force someone to be more productive and innovative in every situation since more and more
people
can easily
success
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due to
their
ambitious
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. If someone is lazy and does not care about anything, he can be far behind
from
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the
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others and can not reach something.
As a result
, when other
people
more
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success
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, he still
enjoy
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his middle-class
economy
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life
.
Thus
, if he
want
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to live like ordinary
people
, he should improve his
life
to be
high-valued
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life
.
For example
, someone who has a small business
change
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her business from
traditional
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system to the online one because of the appearance of online
shoppings
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In addition
, in my point of view, several
society
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societies
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who are very ambitious to through their
live
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would give positive development to their
life
since they can build great
habit
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habits
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that
success
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people
usually
done
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.
For instance
, they get up
at
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early morning, go to the office or their business, create several brilliant ideas and they become a
hard-worker
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person
everyday
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.
Those habit
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can boost their self-development,
as
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a
result
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they can easily become
a
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loaded
people
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person
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.
Hence
, the more strict their
life
is, the more good for their daily habit.
To sum up
, I believe that competitiveness is a great atmosphere for boosting
humans'
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life
quality. Since it can
give
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positive
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influence individuals to be more creative and innovative,
hence
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they can be a person who live in high
economical
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economic
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value.
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