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Most large companies nowadays operate multi-nationally. To what extent multinational companies have responsibility toward local communities in which they operate?

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It is true that the majority of big corporations operate on a global scale;
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, these companies have partial responsibility for the area where they are located.
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 essay strongly agrees with
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 point through an analysis of local people's work and quality of
life
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 point is that multinational associations provide locals with a better chance of finding work. When these organizations expand their operations into new territories, the
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 step is to sign a commitment with the government to use local labour. Following
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 location research, which is best accomplished by hiring locals.
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, the community has more job options, which helps them live
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 is why I believe that multinational corporations have an impact on the labour market. Another point is that job opportunities improve the quality of
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 for locals. Ordinarily, international companies always have higher requirements, so their staff gets better-paid salaries than domestic enterprises. With
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 remuneration, individuals spend more on their education, food, and entertainment. Obviously, the local standard of living has improved, and they are delightful. In
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 regard, I believe that a higher salary would raise one's standard of living to a higher level. In conclusion, multinational corporations that want to develop their businesses around the world would benefit residents by creating more jobs and
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 helping to improve their quality of
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. As
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, I completely support the idea that these institutions have partial responsibility toward the local communities in which they operate.
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