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Many people that media coverage has becoming increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem.

#people #media #coverage
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 of
people
 are more aware of how conflicting
media
 coverage has become. I strongly believe that the
internet
 and social
media
 play a significant role
on
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this
 issue.
On
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this
 digital age, everything operates on
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an algorithm
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algorithm
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 where the users are exposed to
media
 based on their personal interests.
This
 may sound unalarming but
this
 could lead to
people
 being nonchalant about issues which are deemed not interesting.
Media
 has to morph itself to fit into the trends and generate content that
people
 will love
instead
 of focusing more on giving credible and accurate information.
For example
, recently Indonesia is starting to implement
the
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 new law called RKUHP.
This
 creates a massive blowout on the
internet
. Everyone has
their
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strong opinions about it, but the problem is every piece of information they see on the
internet
are
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 generated based on their beliefs and
people
 are not exposed to their opposing views. Conflicts happen when
people
 are not listening to what happens on the other side of the door. As mentioned earlier, algorithms on social
media
 are one of the reasons why there
are
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 so much bias
on
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media
. Education is very much needed to solve
this
 issue.
People
 need to learn how to use
internet
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 ethically.
On the other hand
, trusted
media
 outlets have to be the bridge throughout
this
 process.
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