SOME PEOPLE TODAY PREFER TO GET ADVICE FOR MEDICAL PROBLEMS AND DO NOT WANT TO VISIT A DOCTOR WHY IS THIS? IS THIS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

In the time of 21st century, people do not like to visit
doctors
due to
heavy
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queue of hospitals and trust issues are the main problem, which is many of them faces in their routine life.
However
, sometimes it is good to
be cure
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the
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normal problems and
disease
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diseases
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at
house
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with several
home-remedies
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home remedies
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.
To begin
with, in
this
modern era, humans are always so careful about their health-related issues. Some individuals are always worried about their health and they regularly do their routine
check-up
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. Whereas, nowadays communities get
the
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basic medicine without
needed
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any kind of prescriptions.
Also
, in some cases
such
as vehicle accidents and in other emergency cases
doctors
are required for
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fast healing and better improvement for
human
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body.
On the other hand
, others believe that it
not
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mandatory to prefer
doctor
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a doctor
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for normal
disease
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diseases
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,
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because some medical problems
such
as fever, cold and diarrhoea
are easily cure
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at home with
follow
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the precautions.
Moreover
,
from
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the use of technology public easily get information about various medicines, which
is help
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public
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with a lower cost compared to hospitals.
For example
, at the time of
covid
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pandemic, there
are
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number
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a number
the number
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of individuals who followed basic guidelines and did not affect by
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a corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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.
Lastly
, I believe that
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doctors
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check-up is only necessary
,
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when
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the human-body
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human-body
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human body
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cannot handle the pain. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that it
is
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totally
depend
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on
situation
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,
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because
doctors
are more knowledgeable compared to a normal person.
Therefore
, I personally think that somewhere it is a negative development for mankind.
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