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The growth of online shoppong will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shoppong #shops #towns #cities
Varied opinions have been put on the table when it comes to online shopping .
However
 , the increasing trend of buying things through
internet
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 will become the reason for all shops in urban areas to be closed . In
this
 essay , I shall fortify the notion with arguments and necessary illustrations before citing my feasible conclusion. On the one hand , the
first
 and perhaps the most important reason behind
this
 seems to be the cheap pricing which is provided by online platforms
such
 as Amazon , Flipkart and other apps . By ,
this
 I mean that the cost of products is too high in stores because they have to pay the transportation bills , which makes them
an
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expensive to purchase as compared to the internet . The
second
reaosn
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reason
 appears to be the replacement services are really good .
In addition
 to
this
 , if
people
 find a
falut
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fault
 in the thing , which is purchased by them
then
 that can be easily replaced by just one
complain
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.
Also
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people
 don't have to travel to places to buy
they
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what they
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 want .
On the other hand
 , a number of
people
 like to do bargaining that saves
thier
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them
 some amount of money , when they go to shops .
Moreover
 ,
this
 cash will help them to invest in
such
 household items for
replacing
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 with
new
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a new
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 one . Meanwhile , the benefit of shopping through stores ,
people
 have to walk to reach that place .
As a result
 , they can maintain their physical fitness ,
also
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 improve communication skills while
doing
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bargaining with
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the shopkeeper
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shopkeeper
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. In conclusion , I think that
importance
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 of shopping in stores will remain
same
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 in the future . But ,
people
 will do shopping online more because of their numerous benefits.
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