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Many people think that zoos are not good enough for animals and they should be improved or animals must go to natural life. What is your opinion ?

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In our century, a lot of people think that
zooes
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zoos
zooms
zones
 are not comfortable enough for
animals
 and they should go to natural life.
This
 is a much-debated issue and I find no
usefulness
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of
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in
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 keeping
in
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them in
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 cages for
animals
.
First
 of all, the idea of keeping wild
animals
 in
zooes
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zoos
 is really a brutal one and
human
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humans
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 should not be proud
of
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act
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 like
this
.
Zoo
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is
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in
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 many countries are used for commercial purposes and no matter what the authorities do. They can not ensure a free life for a bird which should be flying in the sky rather than trying to escape from the cage. Keeping
animals
 free is more logical than isolating them
,
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 because if we keep
animals
 caged, they would not be able to have fresh air and chase other
animals
.
Therefore
, it is cruel
keeping
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animals
 confined in small spaces. It is advisable to put our efforts into keeping our creatures in their natural habitats, in order to give them the opportunity to experience
normal
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a normal
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 life. In conclusion, the zoo serves no useful purpose and there are no good reasons to put
the
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animals
 and birds in
zooes
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zoos
zones
.
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