In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
Safety
of Correct article usage
The safety
children
has always been top
priority of families and Add an article
a top
the top
the
society. Nowadays, some Correct article usage
apply
part
of the country established restrictions to limit Fix the agreement mistake
parts
children
to go out alone after a certain time
at night. While some critices
may argue it Correct your spelling
critics
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is againsts
againsts
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against
human
rights of freedom, I believe the advantages outweigh Correct article usage
the human
disadvantages
in Correct article usage
the disadvantages
this
case.
To begin
with, not going out in the evening means children
could spend more time
at home, and it has some positive impact
associated with it. Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
Firstly
, youngsters can spend more time
on
studying. Change preposition
apply
As
the highly competitive job market, it is better for them to prioritize Change preposition
In
study
and concentrate on Wrong verb form
studying
home work
. Correct your spelling
homework
Secondly
, family
will gain benefits Add an article
the family
which
stronger bonding is maintained by having extensive Change preposition
in which
time
together. Finally
, if there is a need for youngsters to go out for activities, such
as attending sports
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a sports
club
, parents can always go with their kids.
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clubs
In addition
, increasing
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the increasing
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the criminal
criminal
rate is a vital factor for to support Replace the word
crime
curfew
. Not only are school Add an article
the curfew
gun shot
attacks increasing in recent yearsCorrect your spelling
gunshot
,
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but,
also
child missing accidents are growing with
a concerning speed. Change preposition
at
Children
are
lack of judgement to identify dangers, Unnecessary verb
apply
leaving
them alone in the evening without Correct word choice
and leaving
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an adult's
adult's
supervision has many potential risks. Change noun form
adult
For instance
, if a child met someone on the way home from tennis class, a follower can easily rub him / her in
a dark corner.
In conclusion, with various benefits Change preposition
into
on
spending more Change preposition
of
time
in doors
and concerning safety reasons outside, I do argue imposing Correct your spelling
indoors
curfew
has more advantages than not doing it.Correct article usage
a curfew
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