In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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of
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priority of families and
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society. Nowadays, some
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of the country established restrictions to limit
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to go out alone after a certain
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at night. While some
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critics
may argue it
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is againsts
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againsts
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against
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rights of freedom, I believe the advantages outweigh
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the disadvantages
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in
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case.
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with, not going out in the evening means
children
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could spend more
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at home, and it has some positive
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associated with it.
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, youngsters can spend more
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on
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studying.
As
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the highly competitive job market, it is better for them to prioritize
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and concentrate on
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.
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,
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the family
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will gain benefits
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stronger bonding is maintained by having extensive
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together.
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, if there is a need for youngsters to go out for activities,
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as attending
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a sports
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club
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clubs
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, parents can always go with their kids.
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,
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the increasing
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the criminal
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criminal
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rate is a vital factor for to support
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the curfew
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. Not only are school
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gunshot
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attacks increasing in recent years
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but,
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also
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child missing accidents are growing
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at
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a concerning speed.
Children
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are
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lack of judgement to identify dangers,
leaving
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and leaving
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them alone in the evening without
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an adult's
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adult's
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adult
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supervision has many potential risks.
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, if a child met someone on the way home from tennis class, a follower can easily rub him / her
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into
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a dark corner. In conclusion, with various benefits
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of
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spending more
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in doors
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indoors
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and concerning safety reasons outside, I do argue imposing
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a curfew
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has more advantages than not doing it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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