Some people say it is important to keep yor home and workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. what is your opinion about this?

Tidy and
well organized
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well-organized
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places are motivation to
working
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work
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peacefully.Majority of the people in the world attempt to keep their living environment clean. My opinion is we should always try to maintain our home and workplace
well
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wellness
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. We prefer to spend our leisure
time
in our
home
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homes
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.Just imagine,if that area is full of
messy
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, it will increase our temper.
That is
not good for our health as well as our relationships.
Therefore
maintaining
peaceful
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a peaceful
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environment is
blessing
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a blessing
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for
who
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those who
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live there. For
instace
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instance
,there is my aunt who is
housewife
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a housewife
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.She
keep
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her house and garden well organized and clean.There is
fresh
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the fresh
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smell when entering
to
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the home as well as garden is full of flowers and shady bushes. Her visitors admire her lot and spend more
time
with her happily.
Notably
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peace of mind directly
connect
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with
the
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apply
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peaceful places. Not only houses and
also
workplaces should be organized and clean.That help to improve employees' creativity and efficacy. There is very limited
time
in our office to
chieve
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achieve
daily tasks.
Additionaly
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Additionally
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, if we have to spend some
time
to find lost things just as
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file
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files
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,there is
huge
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impact
to
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our daily work list.
Moreover
, if the workplace
welcome
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visitors,daily office cleaning is very important because the place is the customers'
first
impression.There is no doubt,
Tideness
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tidiness
and well keeping must be the
first
rule in the work area. In conclusion,we should keep our environment properly.
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directly
connecting
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to our mental health as well as physical health.Untidy nature creates more troubles in our lives.
Therefore
cleaning
living
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the living
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area daily should
be
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become our life
habbit
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habit
habits
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tidiness
  • organization
  • mental well-being
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • aesthetic
  • comfort
  • safety
  • hygiene
  • clutter
  • creativity
  • spontaneity
  • cultural norms
  • upbringing
  • balance
  • extremes
  • personalized system
  • orderliness
  • stress reduction
  • welcoming environment
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