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All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

#children #language #school #child
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Nowadays, some people aspire to learn foreign
languages
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due to
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 globalization.
Hence
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, I strongly agree that
children
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 should learn other
languages
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 apart from their
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mother tongue
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 when they are beginning
the
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school. I will explain my view in
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 paragraph.
Firstly
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,
according to
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the
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some
study
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studies
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,
the
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children
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children's
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brain
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brains
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could
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 more actively and easily learn foreign
languages
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 when they are younger.
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, learning ability and
people
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people's
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 age are inversely related
with
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each
others
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other
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, some individuals are only able to speak two to three
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 whilst
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a russian
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russian
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girl who is
seven year-old
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seven-year-old
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 can communicate in seven
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 with others.
Secondly
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,
the
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globalization is influencing
to
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everyone which requires
to
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us to
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 know about
internet
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the internet
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or
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and
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 modern technologies.
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is
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likely leads that not only
adult
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adults
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,
children
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 should
have
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 learn foreign
languages
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 in order to use
it
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them
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. If they are able to consume the internet using
languages
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, they efficiently enhance their social skill and
could
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can
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 cope with their formal education,
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, they
able
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 to access
to
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the
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a
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 variety of
sourced
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 presented in other
languages
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In addition
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, it is possible to change
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children
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children's
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 vision about the world positively and widely.
In contrast
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, I agree with those who argue that learning many
thing
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things
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 at
same
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 time might negatively affect
to
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children
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children's
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 learning ability, and they could be confused.
However
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,
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children
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children's
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brain
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brains
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 and learning skills
are tend
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 to quickly
adopt
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adapt
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with
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 new things than
adult
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adults
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.
To conclude
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, I believe that
children
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 should learn foreign
lamguages
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languages
 based on their natural
skill
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skills
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 in
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modern era because there is never early to learn
languages
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